Terrible spelling, and no punctation. xxnx tv Idea good, but story rushed.«1» Terrible spelling, and no punctation. Idea good, but story rushed.«1» 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-08-14 21:58:11Interesting but you need to tell us a little more. for that reason, i hope there r more parts to it.Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-08 19:21:13Very badly written. Idea good, but story rushed.«1» 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-08-14 21:58:11Interesting but you need to tell us a little more. Terrible spelling, and no punctation. Idea good, but story rushed.«1» You sem to have shortened the story like you are in a hurry.Anonymous readerReport 2010-05-13 15:55:42good story but make sure you use full words and check punctuationcassandra789Report 2010-04-08 20:51:59the story was short. for that reason, i hope there r more parts to it.Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-08 19:21:13Very badly written. for that reason, i hope there r more parts to it.Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-08 19:21:13Very badly written. You sem to have shortened the story like you are in a hurry.Anonymous readerReport 2010-05-13 15:55:42good story but make sure you use full words and check punctuationcassandra789Report 2010-04-08 20:51:59the story was short. Idea good, but story rushed.«1» Idea good, but story rushed.«1» 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-08-14 21:58:11Interesting but you need to tell us a little more. for that reason, i hope there r more parts to it.Anonymous readerReport 2010-04-08 19:21:13Very badly written. Idea good, but story rushed.«1»
