I can’t wait to read part 2.Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-23 22:20:52…It wasn’t good, at all. blunt. Xnxx hot It would be better to find someone else to proofread it so that you don’t keep making the same mkstake. Very little description. There was no build up. Other than that and a little bit more buildup and detail, it is excellent. 16 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2015-05-21 04:05:06The story is good, although you need to proof read your work. 16 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2015-05-21 04:05:06The story is good, although you need to proof read your work. And just way too… Try harder.«1234» There was no build up. Made me cum hard and I’d rate it a 8/10.anonymous readerReport 2012-08-24 06:59:40kyle you need n to suck you dryanonymous readerReport 2011-03-06 08:59:43Not too bad of a story, but get a proofreader who does well in English, because your spelling, grammar, punctuation, possessives, and tenses have many errors, which make this story difficult to read.Anonymous readerReport 2009-03-24 13:11:15Good story! There was no build up. 16 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2015-05-21 04:05:06The story is good, although you need to proof read your work.
