try making it a longer story next time.«1» try making it a longer story next time.«1» 2 comments«1»READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil more keep up the good job and write more like a part 2 to this 1 alil longer and better :)READERReport 2004-03-30 13:54:15that was good but too short. 2 comments«1»READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil more keep up the good job and write more like a part 2 to this 1 alil longer and better :)READERReport 2004-03-30 13:54:15that was good but too short. Xnxx hot try making it a longer story next time.«1» 2 comments«1»READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil more keep up the good job and write more like a part 2 to this 1 alil longer and better :)READERReport 2004-03-30 13:54:15that was good but too short. 2 comments«1»READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil more keep up the good job and write more like a part 2 to this 1 alil longer and better :)READERReport 2004-03-30 13:54:15that was good but too short.
