If not, then either do some research and read other people’s work, get laid, or find a new hobby. If this is your very first piece of ero-literature, then you are off to a okay start. Xnxx hot Some things to improve:
I would recommend proof-reading/spell-checking before submitting your work. However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN. Be a little more descriptive, and draw out the story a little more. If not, then either do some research and read other people’s work, get laid, or find a new hobby. Some things to improve:
I would recommend proof-reading/spell-checking before submitting your work. However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN. 37 comments«12345»Anonymous readerReport 2016-02-28 15:26:32mum fucking is so bloody hot, i love this story, pity you didn’t do her up the her tight arsehole though,
from misterjedi.anonymous readerReport 2013-08-10 07:06:33Okay, personally I am a fan of Incest writings. You know, detail!anonymous readerReport 2013-08-10 07:06:02Okay, personally I am a fan of Incest writings. Some things to improve:
I would recommend proof-reading/spell-checking before submitting your work. However, this one sadly made my stomach churn DUE TO THE FACT THAT THIS ONE WAS POORLY WRITTEN. If not, then either do some research
